Comments for Silence of Heart http://20219shelly.wordpress.com Write down what I think :) Mon, 25 May 2009 11:17:15 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on The Artwork I like in the Display,”25 Years Retrospect of Fang Li Jun” by Shelly http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/2009/05/24/the-artwork-i-like-in-the-display25-years-retrospect-of-fang-li-jun/#comment-14 Shelly Mon, 25 May 2009 11:17:15 +0000 http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/?p=51#comment-14 Dear Teacher Joseph, Thank you for your reading and comment. I've corrected my mistake in this composition. But, I'm Yi-Hsuan:) Dear Teacher Joseph,
Thank you for your reading and comment.
I’ve corrected my mistake in this composition.
But, I’m Yi-Hsuan:)

]]> Comment on The Artwork I like in the Display,”25 Years Retrospect of Fang Li Jun” by josef http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/2009/05/24/the-artwork-i-like-in-the-display25-years-retrospect-of-fang-li-jun/#comment-13 josef Mon, 25 May 2009 10:02:35 +0000 http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/?p=51#comment-13 Dear Ya-mong, You have done a great job here! Not only your ideas are great but your writing also improved a lot! Though minor errors remain, it demonstrate your ability to express your thoughts with clarity and in solid paragrpahs. IF you can correct some mistakes and give more details to support your claims, it would be. a superb piece of art review! I like it a lot! Structure error: read the sentence again and correct it. Too many dangling clauses. There is also a idea I thought is this work tells us people should care more about minor group in society. Dear Ya-mong,

You have done a great job here!
Not only your ideas are great but your writing also improved a lot! Though minor errors remain, it demonstrate your ability to express your thoughts with clarity and in solid paragrpahs. IF you can correct some mistakes and give more details to support your claims, it would be. a superb piece of art review! I like it a lot!

Structure error: read the sentence again and correct it. Too many dangling clauses.
There is also a idea I thought is this work tells us people should care more about minor group in society.

]]> Comment on Keep the Depression Away by Shelly http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/2009/05/22/keep-the-depression-away/#comment-12 Shelly Sat, 23 May 2009 02:44:45 +0000 http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/?p=49#comment-12 Yeah, I agree with you. Thanks for your comment:) Yeah, I agree with you.
Thanks for your comment:)

]]> Comment on Keep the Depression Away by Stuart http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/2009/05/22/keep-the-depression-away/#comment-11 Stuart Fri, 22 May 2009 15:29:09 +0000 http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/?p=49#comment-11 Exercise is an awesome way to make you feel better because of the chemicals it releases. But also because it makes you feel better about yourself, and gives you time to relax your mind. Exercise is an awesome way to make you feel better because of the chemicals it releases. But also because it makes you feel better about yourself, and gives you time to relax your mind.

]]> Comment on Reading Journal of The Mill on the Floss from George Eliot by josef http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/2008/07/29/reading-journal-of-the-mill-on-the-floss-from-george-eliot/#comment-10 josef Sun, 18 Jan 2009 14:58:10 +0000 http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/?p=8#comment-10 Dear Shelly sorry for the belated comment. You have done a very good job in writing this book review. Except for some minor mistakes, you have nicely capture the main theme of the story and well expressed your own reading of it! Well done!! best, Joseph Dear Shelly

sorry for the belated comment.
You have done a very good job in writing this book review. Except for some minor mistakes, you have nicely capture the main theme of the story and well expressed your own reading of it!
Well done!!

best,
Joseph

]]> Comment on Advice to Freshman by Shelly http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/2008/10/24/advice-for-freshman/#comment-9 Shelly Fri, 14 Nov 2008 15:25:24 +0000 http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/?p=29#comment-9 Advice for this article 1. - To learn well in your high school time (for you), *You can omit “for you”, it seems too talkative. 2. - (They) are joining the extracurricular clubs, *There 3. - Joining the club can make you know (the skill) of making friends and how to get along with others. *skills 4. - you will get (the methods) of dealing with a stack of things. * methods 5. -you may develop a value of (thing) *things 6. - I learned how to prepare a speech and (trying) giving a speech on presence of lots of people. *tried This is good article. Contents is very abundant, you gave many examples to support your ideas. You are not only asking them for schoolwork but also advise them to try something new. Reading books except textbooks is a main point in high school; you gave this good advice to them. I think that they will get many useful things. by Stacy 30218 Advice for this article
1. - To learn well in your high school time (for you),
*You can omit “for you”, it seems too talkative.
2. - (They) are joining the extracurricular clubs,
*There
3. - Joining the club can make you know (the skill) of making friends and how to get along with others.
*skills
4. – you will get (the methods) of dealing with a stack of things.
* methods
5. -you may develop a value of (thing)
*things
6. – I learned how to prepare a speech and (trying) giving a speech on presence of
lots of people.
*tried

This is good article. Contents is very abundant, you gave many examples to support your ideas. You are not only asking them for schoolwork but also advise them to try something new. Reading books except textbooks is a main point in high school; you gave this good advice to them. I think that they will get many useful things.
by Stacy 30218

]]> Comment on A Leader’s Character by 20219shelly http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/2008/10/03/a-leader%e2%80%99s-character/#comment-8 20219shelly Fri, 03 Oct 2008 15:05:11 +0000 http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/?p=15#comment-8 Corrcetions: 1.his challenge he would (met) and his failure. meet 2.The group will (kike) to be (led) like lead Content and Organization: good organization! have many example to support your idea. use correct gramer, only few error spelling. nice work!! From 30218 Stacy Corrcetions:
1.his challenge he would (met) and his failure.

meet

2.The group will (kike) to be (led)

like lead
Content and Organization:

good organization! have many example to support your idea.
use correct gramer, only few error spelling.
nice work!!

From 30218 Stacy

]]> Comment on The University Funds of the Sport Activities Should be Equal as the Libraries by astorpia http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/2008/01/20/the-university-funds-of-the-sport-activities-should-be-equil-as-the-libraries/#comment-3 astorpia Mon, 21 Jan 2008 07:19:07 +0000 http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/2008/01/20/the-university-funds-of-the-sport-activities-should-be-equil-as-the-libraries/#comment-3 Great job!! You did it in time!! That's really wonderful!! Have a nice vacation!! P.s. VWrong spelling of the word "Equal"!! Great job!! You did it in time!! That’s really wonderful!! Have a nice vacation!!

P.s. VWrong spelling of the word “Equal”!!

]]> Comment on How to Improve English Listening by astorpia http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/2007/10/17/how-to-improve-english-listening/#comment-2 astorpia Mon, 29 Oct 2007 08:08:54 +0000 http://20219shelly.wordpress.com/2007/10/17/how-to-improve-english-listening/#comment-2 Mistakes are as follows: 1. Through it, you will get the main idea or story in TV, then know the sentence or words you don’t understand. --> correction: ..on TV, "AND" then... (you need conjunction to connect the two clauses) 2. And your listening will be improved step by step. Better make it this way: This way, your listening.... Mistakes are as follows:

1. Through it, you will get the main idea or story in TV, then know the sentence or words you don’t understand. –>

correction: ..on TV, “AND” then… (you need conjunction to connect the two clauses)

2. And your listening will be improved step by step.

Better make it this way:

This way, your listening….

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